ZIP ZAP SCOOTER
ZIP ZAP
Here and there
Racing down the drive way
ZOOM ZAP
Up and down the drive way
Having so much fun.
by Emmie D.
Fall Fun!
Gather all the leaves then throw
up up they fly
scary faces everywhere
who shall I scare?
knock knock who’s there
trick or treat thank you!
by Lauren O.
The Wavy Plant?
You,
with white wavy moss
growing off you.
You,
with your mysterious holes.
You,
look like an anemone.
I wonder where
you live.
Wait!
You
are a mushroom!
Of course… The Woods.
by Kayla W.
Me and my mom
are just alike
We love each other dearly
I always do what she does
She is my role model
We love to do every thing together
MY MOM IS THE BEST!!!!
by Kyah W.
Nana’s House
I have a special bedroom.
I have a yellow bedspread.
I love a big brown teddy bear.
I feel safe and loved there.
by Olivia G.
Not Just a Plain Rock
White with glitter
Partially gray
like a small glacier
floating
away
by Lucas K.
Which image or phrase is your favorite?
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I really enjoyed the poems but Zip Zap Scooter was my favorite.
ReplyDeleteThanks for visiting, Russ. I just hopped over to your blog...your art makes me smile.
ReplyDeleteI love the fact that all these poems are very different from one another, and they each have a different kind of energy and mood. "Not Just a Plain Rock" is my favorite, because I'm writing a book about the Arctic right now.
ReplyDeleteKeep writing, all of you!
Great poems! I love The Wavy Plant? because it's not about a typical looking mushroom. I've never seen that kind before, it's very unique! Well done, Kayla W!
ReplyDeleteI really liked this poems! Thanks for sharing. I especially liked Fall Fun, because I'm a huge Halloween fan. But I also really liked Not Just a Plain Rock. Very creative! Well done, all of you!
ReplyDeleteAll of these poems have such wonderful and unique sounds and shapes, not to mention beautiful pieces of imagery, such as "like an anemone" and "like a small glacier floating away". Keep playing with those words and have fun!
ReplyDeleteThese poems are all distinct and fantastic. I really like "Nana's House", because I can just feel the warmth and happiness. I also was partial to "Not Just a Plain Rock". Well done to you all!
ReplyDeleteThese are wonderful poems. I hope you're all very proud of your work. Thanks for sharing!
ReplyDeleteAll wonderful poems! It is a gray day in Maine today and I feel like I want to curl up on the yellow beadspread in Nana's House -so safe and warm, or maybe float away to an adventure on top of Not Just A Plain Rock's glacier. You are ALL outstanding. Keep writing.
ReplyDeleteBeth Cadena
Not Just a Plain Rock - where are you going? You make me wonder.... Also, I want to curl up on Nana's yellow bedspread, zip zap down my driveway, gather all those leaves and look for mushrooms with mysterious holes. To the mom in Mom and Me, you must feel terrific. What a great job!
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Cheryl Lawton Malone
What talented poets this class has! I enjoyed reading all of them. I love poems about nature, so the Not Just a Plain Rock and The Wavy Plant spoke to me in particular. Wonderful writers! Continue getting down your thoughts and words on paper!
ReplyDeleteWhat wonderful poems! Thank you for sharing.
ReplyDeleteThese are my favorite lines/images from each:
•Emmie: I love the z sounds in zip-zap scooter—zoom
•Lauren: The way you used traditional phrases, trick or treat, knock-knock in unexpected and surprising way, is so much fun!
•Kayla: The structure of the poem, using “you,” made it conversational and the images, especially the anemone are so nice and concrete.
•Kyah: You love your mother—how sweet! I hope you’ve shown her your poem.
•Olivia: Your images in Nana’s house are so cozy and warm.
•Lucas: I love all of the hard consonantal sounds: glitter, gray and glacier, and the ending rhyme of gray and away. The idea of a glacier floating away is lovely too, and it’s especially nice how the words are floating away too.
Great job everyone! I really enjoyed reading them. Go, poets!!
~Maria Gianferrari
Claire, Heather, Karen, Bruce, Aaron, Dede, Beth,Cheryl, Carlo, and Maria,
ReplyDeleteThank so you much for your thoughtful comments to these poets. I appreciate them and I know the students will, as well.
I really liked all the poems in every installment!
ReplyDeleteI hope all the poets write lots more poems.
Wow fourth graders! Amazing work!!! Like the leaves in Fall Fun, I am blown away! Bravo to artist-teacher and students!!!
ReplyDeleteI love your poems filled with scooter sounds, Halloween images, nature's unique specimens, places and people that hold special places in your hearts. You are playing with sound, punctuation, shape and making careful decisions about word choice. Very well done, all of you fourth grade poets!
ReplyDeleteIt made me smile to read your wonderful poems! You all did a great job of creating vibrant images with words. Lucas, I especially love how the words you selected for "Not Just a Plain Rock" roll right off my tongue. Isn't it fun to write something that sounds like art?
ReplyDeleteGreat writing! Each of these has something unique going for it:
ReplyDeleteMost Energetic: Zip Zap Scooter
Most Recognizeable Memory: Fall Fun
Most Surprisingly Visual: The Wavy Plant
Most Loving: Me and My Mom
Most Heartfelt: Nana's House
Best Use of Poetic Devices: Not Just a Plain Rock
Questions for the poets: What do you like about your poems? What do you not like? Is there something you think you could - or should - change, to make your poem better?
Wow! I can't believe how many wonderful people stopped by to leave comments for these poets. Thank you Jane, Anne Marie, Joyce, Kate, and Matt for your thoughtfulness.
ReplyDeleteHmm...Mr. Dav's Class... What thoughts to you have for Matt?